This is pretty awesome. I especially love how you included Feral's oft-overlooked Enforcer sergeant (whose name we now know is Talon). A nice touch. I like when people include minor supporting characters like him.
And I see, too, that Abel (whose name we now know is actually Emil) changed jobs. I guess Megakat Biochemical fired his worthless old behind after he literally let Dr. Viper in under his nose. But if that's the case, did Sinian hire him out of pity? 'Cause I don't think that old coot could protect a vending machine.
Or is it just a coincidence the musuem's elderly has the same name as the elderly guard at the biochemical lab (or at least the name we thought
he had; curse Paul Eiding's weird pronunciation of "Emil"!)?
Overall, this is very, very good for what it is. Very noir-ish and close in tone to what Glenn Leopold actually wrote.